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CMC 23:
Aqueous Nocturne
"Nocturnes are generally thought of as being tranquil, often expressive
and lyrical, and sometimes rather gloomy, but in practice pieces with
the name nocturne have conveyed a variety of moods. Do what you want,
but your piece should evoke both feelings of night and of water; could
be a fountain, or a lake, a river, the ocean, rain, a waterfall, a puddle,
a glass of water, whatever."
-Ubernym
Results!
Text results and critiques
There are 13 entries
and 2 bonus entry for this round...
HoboKa - "Nocturne
of the Depths"
"Deep, vast, blue sea;
Ah, how I covet thee.
So close, yet so far,
Your beauty cannot be marred.
Deep, vast, blue sea;
It is you whom I seek.
So close, yet so far,
My desire cannot be barred.
Deep, vast, blue sea;
I know what secrets you keep.
But If only I could traverse...
into thy deep.
So that I may find my eternal sleep...
Deep, vast, blue sea;
My body and soul...
I give to thee.
For my life is but a fickle dream.
And as the dead utter their soundless scream.
I offer my life to thee.
For there is no redemption for me.
Understand, you must. As my soul is tainted.
Deep, vast, blue sea.
It is you whom I seek.
So close, yet so far,
My desire cannot be barred.
Thus...
I implore of you:
Consume my body and soul.
For my life is but a fickle dream..."
quia - "Moonlight
Fountain"
"A fountain is pouring with life while the moonlight is shining
in the night."
Henrik Summanen - "Midnight
Raindrops"
No description given.
Maquis - "Nocturne
Eridani"
"This was inspired by an old myth: a water nymph is accidentally
captured by a fisherman who, captivated by her beauty, can't bring himself
to let her go. They marry and have children, but she is forever torn by
her love of land and sea. I imagine her returning to the shoreline by
night to feel the waves on her feet, unaware that her husband is watching,
afraid that one night she will be wooed back by the sea and he will lose
her forever.
There are three characters in this story: the nymph is represented by
the flutes, the fisherman by the reeds, and the sea by the strings. Eventually
the sea overwhelms everything and causes the nymph to join its theme,
leaving the fisherman alone. But the flute echoes the oboe's last mournful
query, suggesting that the story may not be over."
Zephyr Tread - "Mesmerized"
"Hey everyone, I'm back! Here's my piece 'Mesmerized'. It's a surreal
waterish piece with a lot of atmosphere. Sit back and prepare to be Mesmerized!"
Blue.Nocturne - "Rain
on Windowsill"
"This is a minimalistic piece that is will relate well with insomniacs.
It's of those rainy nights when you can't sleep, when you hear the water
trickling on the windowsill of your room and the ticking of your clock.
Though not quite a romantic Nocturne, it definitely is a musical piece
dedicated to sleepless rainy nights. I would have liked it longer, but
sometimes there just is not enough time... tick tock tick tock."
Ben Jacobson - "A
Ghost's Love Overlooking the Edge"
"'A Ghost's Love Overlooking the Edge' is a beautiful story of two
Ghosts who meet each other near the cliffs edge at night, the cliff looks
over a vast sea lit only by the moonlight."
just64helpin - "Universal
Solvent"
"I figure that a conceptual piece regarding water should have a
sense of randomness to it, representing patternless fluidity. My goal
then was to quickly improvise a majority of the work."
Nario - "Nocturnal
Hydro-Rhythms"
"In the dark blue corners of the Atlantic Ocean, there was a school
for fish. When the fish got out of school for the day, they would usually
hang out at the park, go home, or cause mischief at the local shopping
malls. However, there were a few of the rebellious, young fishies that
hung out with the 'big boys' at the Salt Water Rave Club. Those brave
souls entered into the jellyfish-infested rave club every Friday night
to dance the night away. Every Saturday morning they'd go home after being
totally wasted and exhausted while having the biggest smile on their faces."
Matthew A. Weber - "Living
Water"
"The idea behind 'Living Water' is a bit of a story. It takes you
on the midnight journey of the water. The beginning takes you on the peaceful
journey through the creek as it gradually grows into a quiet river. Suddenly,
it drops over a waterfall into the rapids and it struggles on it's way
until it eventually quiets itself as it enters the vastness of the great
ocean. Thus bringing the water to another quiet place in the journey or
life of the water."
Binweasel - "Broken"
"Day by day, the sun fades away
Consternations grow faces grey
Constellations glow, shining bright
As night by night, we sail out of sight
Dark rain falls, the men's spirits pall
'Neath the drenching might of the squall
Teeth are clenching tight while we wait
Dark seas rise to try to take the bait
Break, break, break, break
Break the ship upon the rocks
Break, break, break away
She races down the dock
Hold on tight, and don't try to fight
The master's tossed our lot in with the night
The masts are lost, we've got no hope now
The Lady smiles or else we go down
Break, break, break, break
Break her spirit and her pride
Break, break, break of day;
The sun begins to rise"
Ubernym - "Ocean
Vignette"
"The ship is drifting peacefully across a tranquil sea. Night is
coming on, and the stars are peeping out their celestial lights."
Mitre7 - "Boardwalk"
"You're walking down the dark and quiet old boardwalk along the
sea as it starts to rain. Suddenly it feels like the rain is dancing around
you. With every drop striking a unique way, you feel as though he is singing
to you. All of a sudden you feel another presence of overwhelming darkness
that slowly creeps over you with great power. You continue strolling the
boardwalk as the two play and dance across the stage that is the boardwalk."
Abadoss - "Through
the Pane"
(bonus entry)
"Though the hearth be naught but embers
My marrow like ice within me
Frozen by the air around me and my own core
I stare into the night's black
Her rain upon the pane of glass
A reminder
There is precious little between her and I
A pane of glass between Life and Death"
quia - "Vast
Ocean"
(bonus entry)
"A sailor is alone at sea in the night. First he is sleeping in
his ship and then wakes up and discovers that there seems to be a storm
coming. He is trying to prepare but it does not help. His ship sinks.
He is alone at sea without a ship but after a while comes another ship
that saves him."
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